GOD, this is messy. How this got a daily 2nd is beyond me. The music bad, man. Get a song that will fits your intro. No one wants to hear ear piercing 8-bit music. It's so out of place and it's such a drag to listen to. You could at least make the music intro have better audio quality. I'll give you massive props for attempting to do some creative, complicated shots, so good on you, dude. Also, by the looks of it, you have no clue how the female body works. Try google searching nude women and study their body proportions and sketch some out. It would really help you improve your characters and make them look more pleasing to the eye. HenryEYEBALLS pretty much said what needed to be said. Just take these into deep consideration and you'll be fine later.